Brennan,+Tarleton,+Chin,+Reinhard

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 * Topic: American Teenage Girl Beauty**
 * Thesis: American Teenager Girls spend a lot time perfecting their appearance by using many different beauty products.**

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Many would find it unbelievable what teenage girls do every morning to achieve their perception of beauty. They spend hours each day putting on makeup or doing something with their hair. Teenage girls in America also spend a lot of money each year on these beauty products. Every year, teenagers are starting to use make up at a younger and younger age. At one point, teenagers may have started using make up at 15 or 16. Now they start as early as 13 or even younger. Some would argue that this is necessary to achieve beauty. Others do not. American Teenager Girls spend a lot time perfecting their appearance by using many different beauty products. This is good intro!

I. What American Teenager Girls Use on Their Heads You should NOT label each section of your paper.
American teenager girls use many items on their hair and and their faces. From lotions to cosmetics, from getting their hair highlighted to putting on lip gloss. Sentence fragment American girls will do almost anything to impress others and look beautiful. The teenage girls of America spend hours in the salon every year getting their hair done. American teenage girls get their hair highlighted, straighten it, curl it, use flat irons, or get extensions. Highlights are usually a lighter color girls like to add to their hair but girls who have lighter hair usually get darker highlights. Girls with naturally wavy and curly hair use straighteners to straighten their hair. Girls with straighter hair like to curl their hair to make it look curly. Flat irons make girls' hair straight with some curls. If people use these things too much on their hair it could permanently ruin their hair and makes it really unhealthy. Usually, $200 are spent on hair products in 12 months by teenagers (Teen Market Profile 15). good information

On their eyes, American teenage girls use mascara, eye liner, and eye shadow. On their lips, they use lip gloss, lipstick, and lip liner. They use blush and lots of lotion to cover up flaws such as acne, pimples, zits, or blackheads (Teenage Beauty 77). Most American girls also like to get piercings on their ears, noses, eyebrows, lips, and even their tongues. On their teeth, they use teeth whitening and get braces to achieve beauty. These products could cause side-effects on peoples skin so people have to watch which products they use on their skin. In 1998, American teens spent $122 billion on makeup and the number is increasing each year (Are Ads Making You Sick? 6). Wow so much money!

Teenage females use many different things to achieve beauty. Some of these things include medical doing such as braces or contacts. Braces are used to make your teeth straight and more attractive. Braces themselves aren't very attractive but when they are taken off the person looks better then ever. Teenage females try to get invisaline, which is clear braces that are unable to be noticed, or iBraces, braces that are on the inside of your teeth and are un-noticeable. These "braces" cost around five hundred dollars to one thousand dollars more then regular braces but parents are willing to pay so their little angel looks good. Citations

Teenage females go tanning to make themselves have a summer glow. This can be unsafe because it is a skin cancer hazard. Skin cancer can come from being exposed to extreme heat for too long. Laying in a booth with UV rays attacking your skin isnt healthy. Teenage females are willing to take this risk to become what they picture as beautiful. It is sad that American teens don't care about sickness as long as they look good. These are just some of the many things American teenage females do to achieve "beauty." good info - where are your citations?

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You Avoid "you" and "your" in professional writing would be surprised at the number of kids, teenagers, even adults who think that they have to look a certain way in order to be beautiful. Fashion plays a big role in this. Many shows like "What Not to Wear" shows people how certain clothes can make you look slimmer and more beautiful. Many magazines such as "People" magazine have a section devoted to what the stars are wearing and how to stay in fashion. Teenage girls read these magazines and then decide that they want to be like that celebrity or like a certain model. Celebs and models really affect the way that American Teenage Girls dress. The fashion changes drastically through the decades. In the 1940's the hot fashion was to be slim and wear fitted suits. This fashion has come back in the 2000's. Right now the rage for teenagers is to be slim. The clothes come and go so fast that it would be considered fruitless to be in fashion. We who is we? spend millions trying to follow the fashion trend. This is shows how obsessed we are with achieving beauty and popularity. Citations? =====

Teenage girls do many things to achieve beauty. And unfortunately, sometimes these things are unhealthy and cause the teenager harm. Some unhealthy ways that teenage girls try to achieve is when they don't eat on purpose to watch their weight. This is called anorexia. Teenage girls' weights become dangerously low and this results in many problems and sometimes even death. Another thing teenage girls do is force themselves to throw up. This is called bulhemia.spelling Teenagers use whatever they can to cause themselves to throw up: fingers, toothbrushes, straws, even pieces of food. Teens also start dieting which is bad for their health. It isn't as bad as anorexia but is still a problem. Teenagers become so obsessed with how they look that they don't even care for their health. This is big problem because the ages for starting anorexia or buhlemia are getting lower and lower. There have been reports of 5 year olds watching very carefully what they eat and how much of it they eat. As the years go on, this is becoming a more and more serious danger to teenage girl health. Scary facts - statistics would have been good here to prove your point - where are your citations?

**IV Wrap-Up**
Many teenage girls will never settle for how they look and don't often go for the natural look. They really like to overdo it with makeup and hair. They just don't realize that true beauty is on the inside and try to be beautiful on the outside. Everyone is beautiful in one way or another and many teenage girls just have to understand that. As mentioned earlier, teen girls spend hundreds and hundreds of dollars each year on makeup. If they understood that they don't need makeup and other beauty products to look beautiful, then they would save a lot of money each year. This extra money could go to college and other more useful things. But unfortunately, they go on each year spending money on pointless beauty products to achieve beauty. This paper is interesting but could use more facts and citations are needed.

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IV. Wrap Up and Closing Statement
This outline looks good but it should be before your paper and your thesis statement should be part of it. Your lesson plan should NOT be on this page


 * Kate Brennan, Alexandra Chin, Eric Reinhard, Rob Tarleton

|| 4/01/2009 ||
 * CLASS : Connections

|| CLASS NAME ManBearPigs || Beauty |||| SPECIFIC TOPIC American Beauty || Students will be able to list what teenage girls do to achieve "beauty" || They need to learn this topic so they will understand why teenage girls do what they do and how they do it. || Students will learn what American Teenage Girls use to achieve "beauty", how beauty has evolved throughout the decades, and an explanation of all the products teenage girls use. The students will also learn some of the unhealthy methods teenage girls use to achieve beauty. They will learn what the American Teenage girl fashion is and how teenage girls are influenced by others, especially celeberties. || Throughout the lesson we will be asking students some questions about the topic. > participate) The students will be asked questions and they will have a group activity.
 * UNIT
 * OBJECTIVE (use an action verb in a description of a measurable outcome) (Ex: Students will be able to tell the difference between inner and outer beauty)
 * OBJECTIVE (use an action verb in a description of a measurable outcome) (Ex: Students will be able to tell the difference between inner and outer beauty)
 * RATIONALE (brief justification -- why you feel the students need to learn this topic)
 * LESSON CONTENT (what is to be taught) (This should be about 4-5 sentences explaining your lesson)
 * INSTRUCTIONAL PROCEDURES # Anticipatory Set (something to get the students' attention)(ex. a journal entry, a quick discussion, a short video clip, etc.) We will be starting with a quick discssion and then use a powerpoint.
 * 1) Teaching procedures (methods you will use) ( This will include lecture, work to be done in class, technology used, group work etc. Set this up as: Step 1: Step 2: etc. We have some lectures, activities which include group work, a powerpoint, and homework.
 * 2) Formative check (progress checks throughout the lesson)(How will you know if the students are understanding what you are teaching?)
 * 1) Student Participation (how you will get the students to
 * 1) Closure (how you will end the lesson) We will end the lesson with a wrap- up discussion.

|| We will grade the worksheet that was to be done in class and we will assign homework asking the students to list some methods that American Teenage Girls use to achieve their idea of beauty.
 * EVALUATION PROCEDURES (how you will measure outcomes to determine if the material has been learned) (What will your homework be?)

|| We will use paper, the smartboard, pencils, a computer, and index cards.
 * MATERIALS AND AIDS (what you will need in order to teach this lesson)(ANY materials you will use.)

Attachments: Please attach any worksheets or resources you use in class.

__**WORKS CITED**__ This should be in alphabetical order.

Moore, Niovi. "Teenagers and the beauty industry." 03 MAR 2008 1. 30 Mar 2009 <http://www.asdfing.com/teenagers-and-the-beauty-industry/>.

Tanner, Lindsey. "One in three white teen girls use tanning booths Study suggests many ignore risk of skin cancer, wrinkles." 09 SEP 2003 1. 30 Mar 2009 <http://www.highbeam.com/doc/1P2-1499253.html>.

YWCA. "Beauty At Any Cost." 01 AUG 2008 9. 30 Mar 2009 <http://www.ywcatriangle.org/pdf/Beauty%20at%20Any%20Cost.pdf>.

MPA. "Teen Market Profile." 42004 20. 30 Mar 2009 <http://www.scribd.com/doc/9520767/Teen-Profile-04>.

AACAP. "Teenagers With Eating Disorders." 2MAY 2008 1. 30 Mar 2009 <http://www.aacap.org/cs/root/facts_for_families/teenagers_with_eating_disorders>.

3/30/2009 Byrd, Shayla. "Style Watch." 17 Nov. 2008: 133- 136

Nicholson, Lindsay. __Teenage Beauty__. Guildford, Surrey, England: Colour Library Books Ltd., 1986. <span style="display: block; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; color: rgb(38, 0, 255); background-color: rgb(255, 0, 208); text-align: left;">Rubrics for your Research Paper

- The research paper must contain a thesis statement that is discussed and proven in the paper. Stick to your topic. 50 pts +50 -Paper discuss beauty in the culture you were assigned and also reflects on how that beauty is maintained. 30pts +15 -Each group must complete an outline BEFORE they start writing their paper and submit it with the final paper. 20 pts +20 - Parenthetical citations (in MLA format) must be used correctly throughout paper. 25 pts +10 - A works cited page must be included at the end of your paper. 20 pts +15 -Researched information must be paraphrased correctly or in quotes. 25 pts +25 --Each group has used at LEAST two book sources, one internet source, and one database source. 15 pts +15 - Paper includes photos and video that enhance writing. 40pts +40 -Paper contains correct spelling, transitions, complex sentence structures, and good vocabulary. 20 pts +10 -Photos and video are placed in appropriate places in the paper. 15pts +15

<span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);">Total Points: 215/260 <span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);"> = 83 B ||