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Mrs. Kopp's comments will be in PURPLE __Topic:__ Chinese Beauty __Thesis:__ Some aspects of beauty in China may be the same as in America, but much of it is probably a lot more interesting.

A: began between the ages of 4 and 7 (only females) B: bandage 10' long 2" wide were wrapped tightly around the foot C: bandage was tightened every day and the girl was put into progressively smaller sized shoes D: process took about 2 yrs. at the end of which the feet were dead and useless E: process was very painful
 * I.** Chinese Foot Binding:

A: alot like our fashion B: not externely elegant C: some clothes symbolize culture D: ancient Chinese clothing favored darker colors E: coordinating and contrasting colors F: distinctive and unusual designs from centuries gone G: five cloud design was to bring good fortune to its wearer H: chinese modern clothing springs from traditional designs and customs I: women too wear a modified form of fashion from the Ch'ing Dynasty J: chinese clothing remains deeply rooted in the country's history and ancient religion and practices A: Similar to our B:Most people change their natural hair to black C:Also incorporating other bright color D:You had to have different hair styles depending on age, gender, and more things E:Teenagers during ancient times would tie there hair into plaits on top of there head F:Men would comb all f their hair to the top of their head, tie it into a knot and then put a hat over it G:Women would curl up their hair and put a pin through it H:The imperial women would guide the fashion in ancient China
 * ll.** Chinese Fashion
 * III.** Chinese Hair Styles

A. Exaggerated look. B. For runways Chinese makeup includes: Bright bold colors, pale skin, fake eyelashes, a lot of glitter, etc. C. Now in China this makeup is "nontraditional, bold, and dramatic". D. Pretty much, if you are wearing any makeup in China then it will have a dramatic look to it. E. When applying this makeup it takes a little bit longer than someone else because it takes time to apply all the makeup so they could have that "dramatic effect". Outline looks good! Very specific
 * IV**. Chinese Makeup

Chinese Beauty has been very elegant, but some methods are very unusual like foot binding. Chinese beauty consists of many different styles today but several hundred years in the past most of the clothes, make up, hair styles, and beauty methods weren't known to many countries other than china and it's surrounding countries. Where is your thesis statement?
 * Intro Paragraph:** You don't have to label each section

Through out time hair in china was always styled black. Even today the base of Chinese hair is the color black. In ancient times women used to wear there wrong one hair tied up into a bun.The younger girls would braid their hair behind their heads. Now on the other hand the men where completely different. The men would shave most of their heads and with what was left they would tie it up, put it on top of their heads and wear a hat over it. As the girls the boys would braid their hair as well.

That was long ago now things are both completely different yet very similar. The style of black stayed but they added many varieties of colors. You cold go to china today and see the weirdest hair styles. You Never use "your" or "you" in professional writing also would be able to see to calmest basic hair styles. Men now a days will have short hair that is messed up looking. While women will have longer hair but still mostly simply. But like i NO don't use I - this is not a conversation said before there are some people that will be abnormal and add in random colors and designs. good information but where are your citations?

 Chinese fashion has been much like ours Who's? over the past few years. Before the people in the world could travel at fast speeds to connect to each other, China had a very unique fashion. The clothing was made of silks, many colors, and lots of patterns and designs. Designs on the clothing respresent spelling culture and and communicates its own vitality. The designs mainly used were dragons and clouds other wise the silk is plain like the clothes in this picture. Citations?
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Ancient Chinese clothing favored darker colors and a fully developed system of matching, coordinating and contrasting colors and shades was used in apparels. Modern Chinese clothing has combined the ancient symbols of good fortune with the more modern fashion aesthetics in the Chinese modern clothing. A wide range of eye catchy designs for children and young people's clothing is designed in modern China, which includes lions, deities and masks of Chinese opera characters. Modern silhouettes are increasingly using designs and appliqué bronzes from the ancient clothing. Prints, weaves, embroideries, and motifs from the ancient culture merge with new age fabrics and styles to create modern Chinese clothing. Is this information paraphrased - no citations at all!!

Chinese makeup has a very dramatic look and effect to it. Runway makeup was especially noticeable. It included bold colors, pale skin, fake eyelashes, and lots of glitter. It was considered "nontraditional, bold, and dramatic." It took a lot longer to apply than other makeup, so it could give a "dramatic effect." The makeup regular people use in America and China would not be as brilliant as Chinese runway makeup.(insert citation)  Everyday makeup in China is a lot like everyday American makeup. People use eyeliner, eye-shadow, and lip color. Chinese people might wear more lipstick than American people. In America, young girls usually wear lip gloss. China seems to also have more individuality, so the makeup probably varies depending on who it is.<span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 0);"> <span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 3);"> <span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 0);">(insert citation) <span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);">Glad you were thinking about putting them in but WHERE ARE THEY? <span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);">Transition needed here Chinese foot binding began in the tenth century. The feet were not meant to turn out twisted and deformed as they have. The procedure was intended to stop the growth of feet. It was considered fashionable, and practiced usually with wealthy women. Foot binding was not stopped until 1911(Mao). Foot binding began when girls were between the ages of four and seven, or sometimes later. It was said to be unbearable pain, and it was hard to walk. The torture many Chinese women have experienced, could not have been worth it by the looks of their feet. How could the mothers, who bandaged their little girl's feet, not feel awful? They knew it was a custom, and indeed must be done(Crites). The bandage was ten feet long, ten inches wide. It was wrapped tightly around the foot, and the foot was nearly bent in half. The four small toes were pushed under the sole of the foot. Girls were put into progressively smaller and smaller shoes. These shoes were called Lotus shoes. The entire process took about two years(Crites). <span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);">Seems very painful! After the bandages were taken off, the feet were, inevitably, dead and useless. They had to be washed and manicured on a daily basis. Many times, the toenails would fall off. Corns might develop on the toes, and would have to be cut off with knives. Basically the feet were ugly, useless, painful, and required more care. The good thing is, you<span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);"> avoid had a smaller shoe size(Crites). Beauty is different all over the world. China, though the on the opposite side of the world as us, has many similarities to what we think is beautiful. Some wear their hair the same way, some wear their makeup the same way, some even wear the same type of clothes. The differences are mostly in the past cultures. Though, even our pasts have similarities. Everyone starts out the same way. <span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);">What does this last sentence mean? Does it fit in the paper?
 * Conclusion:**

This paper could have been much better -paraphrasing and citations were needed throughout. Some of the information was interesting but there was no thesis statement. The thesis in your outline is about how Chinese beauty may be the same but more interesting than American beauty BUT there were NO comparisons made to America. I also don't see a video?

<span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif;">[|Works Cited:] <span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);">Good but should be in ABC order [|Mao, John. "Chinese Foot Binding." - could not find article again to get information] [|Crites, James A.. "CHINESE FOOT BINDING." 8/25/1995 <http://www.angelfire.com/ca/beekeeper/foot.html>.-others need to do citations] [] []

Chesley, Paul. __Chinese Woman in Theatrical Makeup and Costume__. 30 Mar 2009

<span style="display: block; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; color: rgb(38, 0, 255); background-color: rgb(255, 0, 208); text-align: left;">Rubrics for your Research Paper

- The research paper must contain a thesis statement that is discussed and proven in the paper. Stick to your topic. 50 pts +20 -Paper discuss beauty in the culture you were assigned and also reflects on how that beauty is maintained. 30pts +30 -Each group must complete an outline BEFORE they start writing their paper and submit it with the final paper. 20 pts +20 - Parenthetical citations (in MLA format) must be used correctly throughout paper. 25 pts Grace +25 (footbinding) Alyssa, Tyler, Wyeth +0 - A works cited page must be included at the end of your paper. 20 pts +15 -Researched information must be paraphrased correctly or in quotes. 25 pts +20 --Each group has used at LEAST two book sources, one internet source, and one database source. 15 pts +15 - Paper includes photos and video that enhance writing. 40pts +20 -Paper contains correct spelling, transitions, complex sentence structures, and good vocabulary. 20 pts +15 -Photos and video are placed in appropriate places in the paper. 15pts +8 <span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);"> Total Points: Grace - 188/260 = 72 C- Alyssa, Tyler, and Wyeth - 163/260 = 63 D