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Mrs. Kopp's comments will be in PURPLE Topic: The Mursi and Surma Women of Ethiopia http://www.mursi.org/life-cycle/lip-plates

**Thesis statement.** The Surma and Mursi women of Ethiopia have a very different outlook of beauty than Americans do. Many of the things they are accustomed to Americans would find incredibly ridiculous. .

- lip plates are worn by The Surma and Mursi women in there 20's. -the plates are out in about 6months prior to the engagement. -the lower lip will be cut into which a small wooden or clay disk is inserted. - As time passes the plates will get bigger until the desired size is achieved. - The lip plates are symbolic to the Surma and Mursi women. - The bigger the lip plates the higher the bride price. - These lip plates should be worn at all times except for private meals,when sleeping and when no men are around. -there are 3 theories as to why women were these,Some say it is a strategic measure taken by the Surma fore fathers to discourage the Arab slave traders who were looking for unblemished slave girls. The second suggestion is related to the belief of the Surma/Mursi people themselves. These people believe evil spirits possess a person entering by way of his mouth. So lip plates are taken as a preventive measure. The third and most likely theory is to declare social status of the girl's family by showing the number of cattle expected for her hand in marriage. -made from red or black mud or wood, -re produced into different sizes -The shape varies from circular to trapezoidal, - some plates have hollow-centered, and with decorative incisions. - some lip plates are up to 5 inches in diamter, - a growing number of women nrefrain from this lip plates thingg- - the bigger the lip plate the moree cattle the women iw worth. -The Suri pride themselves on their scars and how many they carry. Women perform [|scarification] by slicing their skin with a razor blade after lifting it with a thorn. After the skin is sliced the piece of skin left over is left to eventually scar -These rituals which are extremely painful are said by some anthropologists are a type of controlled violence; a way of getting the younger tribe members use to seeing blood and feeling pain. It’s also a way of adapting these young children to their violent environment
 * Lip Plates:** Why are these notes here? This should be the final paper only!

- the surma and mursi people have been known to paint there bodies white for some occasions. -popular amongst children, is painting of imaginative patterns on their faces and bodies with the help of white fossil lime.
 * Body art:**

Intro You should NOT label each section of your paper -have you ever labeled an essay before? Imagine removing the lower teeth from your mouth and cutting open your bottom lip and replacing them with a clay or wood plate. This procedure is very painful but it represents beauty, wealth, and power in Ethiopia. The Surma and Mursi women of Ethiopia have a very different outlook of beauty than Americans do. Many of the things they are accustomed to Americans would find incredibly ridiculous. Excellent intro!

1st Body Paragraph: Body art beauty in the Mursi and Surma tribe of Ethopia is to paint patterns on their bodies. For the tribe celebrations they would paint their bodies white. They would paint their bodies white for spirtual reasons. Popular amongchildren was to paint imaginative patterns on their faces and bodies with the help of white fossil lime. Interesting - more details needed - where are the citations?

2nd Body Paragraph: Lip plates play as a big role in the beauty and society of the Mursi and Surma women in Ethiopia. Lip plates are big plates put into the lower lip of women. The plates are usually made out of wood, metal, or clay. The bigger the plate, the higher the bride price the women is worth and the more attractive she will look. They input the lip plate 6 months prior to her engagement. To put the lip plate in, they first take out her lower row of teeth to make room for the plate. Then they make a hole by using a wooden stick and ripping the lower lip wide enough to fit in the plate and when time goes on and her lip is stretched out enough, they will swap out the plate with a bigger one until the desired plate size is put in. This is a very painful process that the women must go through to be considered beautiful. Sometimes the lip tears and if this happens she will be considered ugly. The reason for these lip plates are not exacly known. But there are three theories:Some say it's a strategic measure taken by the Surma fore fathers to discourage the Arab slave traiters to who were looking for unblemished slave girls. The second theory is related to the Mursi/Surma people themselves. They believe that evil spirits enter someone through their mouths. So lip plates are a symbol to protect them of the possessing evil spirits. The third is basically for the purpose of the girls' social status and how much cattle she costs for her to be married. Great info but no citations - where is this info from??

3rd Body Paragraph: Beauty in Ethiopia is very important, meaning wealth and power not only just the look of beautiful. In order to look this beautiful and receive the power and wealth these women of Ethiopia go through a large amount of pain getting lip plates. Other concepts of beauty in Ethiopia would be piercings, body art, and scarification. Scarification is preformed by slicing their skin with a razor blade after lifting it with a thorn. This extremely painful procedure is done to represent controlled violence; a way of getting the younger tribe members use to seeing blood and feeling pain. This is also considered beauty in their tribe. To think that women go through this much pain just to look and feel beautiful, but only in the eyes of their tribe; because to us as Americans will look at this in disgust and a bit scary. Why would it be scary? Explain! Citations?

Conclusion: In conclusion, beauty in Ethiopia is very different from our American society. What Ethiopians consider beautful, Americans would consider abstract. In Ethiopia beautiful is lip plates and painting white paint on themselves, this is not only symbolizing beauty but wealth. Americans consider beautiful as make-up, expensive clothes, wealth, as well as many other things that would seem unlawful. Most of what Ethiopians do and practice for beauty as their norm is totally taboo to Americans. Great closing!

Ladies - I'm disappointed in this paper because although your information is interesting and well written you have NO citations which is considered PLagiarism and NO works cited page. What happened??

__**Outline**__ This should be before the paper and your thesis statement should be included here I. Introduction (theisis) II. First Paragraph (body art) A.Tattoos B.Cultural Body Paint III. Second Paragraph (Lip plates) A. What are lip plates B.How they put in lip plates C.Reason for lip plates VI.Third Paragraph (Beauty|) A. What is considered beautiful B.Lip plates (why they are beautiful) C.Body Art (why they are beautiful) V.Conclusion

Where is your works cited page?? Rubrics for your Research Paper

- The research paper must contain a thesis statement that is discussed and proven in the paper. Stick to your topic. 50 pts +40 -Paper discuss beauty in the culture you were assigned and also reflects on how that beauty is maintained. 30pts +30 -Each group must complete an outline BEFORE they start writing their paper and submit it with the final paper. 20 pts +20 - Parenthetical citations (in MLA format) must be used correctly throughout paper. 25 pts +0 - A works cited page must be included at the end of your paper. 20 pts +0 -Researched information must be paraphrased correctly or in quotes. 25 pts +25 --Each group has used at LEAST two book sources, one internet source, and one database source. 15 pts +0 - Paper includes photos and video that enhance writing. 40pts +40 -Paper contains correct spelling, transitions, complex sentence structures, and good vocabulary. 20 pts +20 -Photos and video are placed in appropriate places in the paper. 15pts +5 all at the top of paper

Total Points: 180/260 = 69 D+