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Outline: __Topic:__ The Mursi and Surma Women of Ethiopia Beauty. __Thesis:__ The Mursi and Surma women of Ethiopia have many interesting beauty techniques that make them look beautiful to themselves. Their main culture beauty secrets are body paint, piercing plates, hairstyles, and jewelry. I. Body Paint a. designs b. clay and vegetable pigments c. face, arms, chest, and legs are painted

II. Piercing Plates a. Process b. Numbers are decreasing c. Bridewealth

III. Hairstyles a. Preparation to start styling b. Concoctions used in hair c. Special occasion styles

IV. Jewelry a. Metal b. Simple styles c. Craftsmen and women at home

V. Everyone in the world has their own beauty secrets and the Surma and Mursi have their own too.

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Topic: The Mursi and Surma women of Ethiopia

The Mursi and Surma women of Ethiopia have many interesting beauty techniques that make them look beautiful to themselves. Their main cultural beauty secrets include body paint, piercing plates, hairstyles, and jewelry. The Mursi and Surma women of Ethiopian beauty techniques are different than Americans. They wear and style many things on their body that is (are) beautiful. Most of their beauty is brought to them by their religion and most of the time they have to follow. Usually the thesis comes at the end of the introductory paragraph. Face painting is a tradition for the Mursi and Surma woman of Ethiopia. They are excellent at it. They do body painting using days and locally available vegetable pigments to trace fantastic patterns on each others faces, chests, arms, and legs. They paint facial features in a formal style. Some designs they might do on children is paint there wrong form face with white clay then polka dot it with red. The reason to their madness is that they do it for fun, entertainment, and celebrations. Where are the citaitons for this paragraph? <span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);"> Should have transitions between paragraphs Lip plates are a huge part of the Mursi and Surma culture. These women would have their mothers or an elder woman of the tribe cut their lower lip. The young ladies would have a small wooden or clay plug inserted until the wound healed. After they got better, each night the girls would insert a slightly larger plug to expand their lower lips. Once the disc got big enough, they would have their four lower front teeth knocked out. This painful process was so the disc could complete a full circle (Turton, David. "Lip Plates and the People who Take Photographs." 6. 30 Mar 2009 []). <span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);">The citation just has to be the author's last name. The lip plates aren ’t necessarily for the women to be beautiful. One theory is that it was to make the women look ugly to slave traders so they would not be taken away from their families. They would take out the plate and have the lip ‘ring’ hang, exposing their empty front lower mouths. Or they would just leave the disc in and just let it pull their faces down with the weight <span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);">Very interesting information! (Turton, David. "Lip Plates and the People who Take Photographs." 6. 30 Mar 2009 []). People still follow this tradition because it is part of their amazing heritage. It is also a way to attract tourists. Tourists to the Mursi and Surma women who have lip plates mean money. People will ask to take picture solely for entertainment. They will pay the women for their time. Mostly the women try to complain because they never get paid enough, but when they try to complain about it to the tourists they just give them the money and run as if the gaping hole in this woman’s lip was contagious. More and more these young women are realizing just how odd lip plates are. Some are even refusing to get them done. Others still get them because they are authentic or because their brothers and fathers force them to because of bridewealth. Bridewealth is how much a woman is worth when she is married. The bigger her lip plate the more cattle her family gets. If a woman doesn’t have a lip plate, her family shouldn’t expect any cattle. Without a lip plate the only way she could get cattle for her family is if the man really loves her(Turton, David. "Lip Plates and the People who Take Photographs." 6. 30 Mar 2009 []). <span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);">excellent information The Mursi and Surma women have some very unique hair styles. They all wear them the same interesting way. The women usually wear there hair parted in the center of their head. (Embassy of Ethiopia, Tokyo, Japan)<span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);">punctuation goes after the citation because it's part of the sentence. They usually have their hair cut short that appears the size of today’s hairstyle “the bob.” (Peoples of Ethiopia ) Their hair rarely is longer than **there** shoulders. The hairstyle is either a bun that is placed behind their ears or they wear long braids. (Embassy of Ethiopia, Tokyo, Japan) Once the hairstyles are done the women usually put some sort of ornament in their hair. The ornament is made of clay, metal, and even mud. For the women who are un-married they usually wear a large iron plate to show themseves un-married.(Gordon, Carillet 27) They use the mud and clay to keep the heather/headpiece on their head.( Hailu) If they do wear a headpiece they usually come down to their shoulders. They also have mini sculptures that they put in there hair. Not only do the women of the tribe wear their hair special ways the children do too. The children usually wear their hair the same ways as their mothers but they also either are bald or wear a head dresses. Most all women of the tribe wear these styles but not to special occasions. Special occasions don’t happen very often for the tribe members so when they do they are very important. The women would put many things in their hair. Some of the thing that goes in their hair is clay, mud, butter, and even metal pieces. (Spectrum Guide to Ethiopia) These hairstyles are very complex and take much time to create. This is just one of the many beauty secrets the Mursi and Surma women have.<span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);"> Well written <span style="font-size: 12pt; font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif; color: rgb(0, 0, 0);"> One thing the Mursi and Surma women of Ethiopia wore on their body that stands out is <span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);">no caps here Jewelry. They have all different kinds of jewelry. Their tribe is known for the famous work of its silversmiths who craft beautiful necklaces, anklets, arm bands, silver chains, bangles, and earrings out of precious metals and wood.(Embassy of Ethiopia, Tokyo, Japan) These items can be purchased at markets and the best pieces of jewelry can be found in homes of craftsman and women. (Embassy of Ethiopia, Tokyo, Japan)The jewelry trend is simple but striking like chunky wristlets and armlets, colorful necklaces, and earrings.(Wilting in the Storm)Mainly their jewelry is actually made out of wood and clay. Wooden beads, bracelets, and clay plates were the main jewelry worn. Jewelry has a lot to do with their culture and their religion. The Mursi and Surma women have many different things that are beautiful to them. Although we don't agree with their tequneques, they probaly dont agree with ours <span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);">who's ? either. Everyone in the world has their own beauty secrets and the Mursi and Surma have their own too.<span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);"> Be sure to proofread!

<span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);">This paper was well done and certainly proved your thesis statement! Great job ladies! media type="youtube" key="V2oRlK_wI_s" height="344" width="425"

<span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);"> You do not have to separate the sources they should all just be in alphabetical order. __** Work cited **__ **Internet-** "Rudi Roels' photostream ." 2009. 24 Mar 2009 []. "bluenoemi online." 2007. 24 Mar 2009 []. "cultral attractions ." 24 Mar 2009 []. "Mursi- lip-service! ." 2006. 24 Mar 2009 []. "Surma people." 24 Mar 2009 []. "Indigenous Cultures." Aug 28, 2008. Integrated ICT Solutions. 24 Mar 2009 [|http://www.dinkneshethiopiatour.com/3-Cultural/3indiginous.htm-]. "Touring Ethiopia." 24 Mar 2009 []. "peoples of ethiopia." 2007. African Adventure Tours. 24 Mar 2009 <http://www.africanadventuretours.net/peoples.html->. Turton, David. "Lip Plates and the People who Take Photograghs." 16 Mar 2009 [|http://www.mursi.org]. **Books-** __ the world book encyclopedia of people and places __. D-H.

Gordon, Carillet, Frances Linzee ,Jean-Bernard. __Ethiopia & Eritrea__. **Data bases-**

Turton, David. "Lip-plates and ‘the people who take photographs’: Uneasy encounters between Mursi and tourists in southern Ethiopia.."__Database__. Vol. 20. June, 2004.

Beckwith and Fisher, Carol and Angela. "The elegant Surma of Ethiopia."__Database__. Vol. 179. February, 1991.

<span style="display: block; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; color: rgb(38, 0, 255); background-color: rgb(255, 0, 208); text-align: left;">Rubrics for your Research Paper

- The research paper must contain a thesis statement that is discussed and proven in the paper. Stick to your topic. 50 pts +50 -Paper discuss beauty in the culture you were assigned and also reflects on how that beauty is maintained. 30pts +30 -Each group must complete an outline BEFORE they start writing their paper and submit it with the final paper. 20 pts +20 - Parenthetical citations (in MLA format) must be used correctly throughout paper. 25 pts +20 - A works cited page must be included at the end of your paper. 20 pts +15 -Researched information must be paraphrased correctly or in quotes. 25 pts +25 --Each group has used at LEAST two book sources, one internet source, and one database source. 15 pts +15 - Paper includes photos and video that enhance writing. 40pts +40 -Paper contains correct spelling, transitions, complex sentence structures, and good vocabulary. 20 pts +10 -Photos and video are placed in appropriate places in the paper. 15pts +15

<span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);">Total Points: 240/260 = 92 A-