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Mrs. Kopp's comments will be in PURPLE! 4/1/09

Where is your outline? It should be right here. The Chinese had customs, and traditions that they thought would enhance their beauty, such customs were foot binding. Women and men in China thought that beauty is different than people in other countries think beauty is.This sentence is a bit awkward. They had different customs then and now women and men in China did many things to make themselves beautiful. Some things they did were very painful but other things did not hurt at all.Their beauty was different and strange among other people in the world. Great Thesis statement! ====**Men in China beauty, through the 20th and 21 century.Incomplete sentence During the 20th century men, started to get more interested in their looks. Recently men have started to get plastic surgery, botox, and other body modifying beauty enhancements. Men now use many skin products and other creams to clean their bodies and make their skins smooth and perfect. Some people even go to the lengths of preparing toilets with special scents, or covers to make it help their beauty. Many people say that many Chinese are very kind, helpful, sweet and their lies inner beauty for them along with their outer beauty. Junior Scholastic; 4/28/2008, Vol. 110 Issue 17, p16-16, 1/2p citation should be in parentheses (like this). **====

====**Some people in China have different views and standards on beauty, apparently their standards in china didn't fit a little girl named Yang Peliyi. There was a girl named Lin Miaoke, and She performed at the China Olympics ceremony with a rendition of "Ode to the Motherland," which has already made her a national celebrity. The only thing is - little Lin mimed the actual song.**====

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====**Speaking on Beijing Radio station, musical director Chen Qigang said the organisers spelling needed a girl with both a good image and a good voice. They faced a dilemma because although Lin was prettier, seven-year-old Yang had the better voice, Mr Chen said. Wow very interesting story what does this say about China and their view of beauty? I'd like to see this idea expanded. **==== Vanessa. "China Olympics Turned Child Beauty Pageant." 12/9/08 22 Mar 2009 <[]>.  citation only needs the last name of the author in parentheses.
 * [[image:http://www.historyforkids.org/learn/china/clothing/pictures/tangyinming.jpg width="191" height="343" caption="ming dynasty chinese women"]] ||
 * ming dynasty chinese women ||

"Ming dynasty (1400's AD) painting by Tang Yin  A transition is needed here to make the paper flow. Men and women in china wore things like tunics. Tunics are like really long t shirts or dresses. Women wore tunics with belts People in China generally wore tunics (like long t-shirts). Women wore long tunics down to the ground, with belts, and men wore shorter ones down to their knees. Sometimes they wore jackets over their tunics. In the winter, when it was cold, people wore padded jackets over their tunics, and sometimes longer pants under them. In early China, poor people made their clothes of hemp or ramie. Rich people wore silk . Most people in China, both men and women, wore their hair long. People said that you avoid "you" in professional writing got your hair from your parents and so it was disrespectful to cut it. this info seems like it is in the wrong paragraph During the Sui Dynasty, in the 500's AD, the emperor decided that all poor people had to wear blue or black clothes, and only rich people could wear colors. Citation?
 * [[image:http://www.historyforkids.org/learn/china/clothing/pictures/footbinding.gif width="300" height="268" caption="footbinding xrays"]]Great picture! ||
 * footbinding xrays ||

X-ray pictures of someone with bound feet and a diagram

In the Sung Dynasty, about 1100 AD, a fashion started at the emperor's court for women to bind their feet. Women thought that to be beautiful they needed little tiny feet, only about three inches long. They got these tiny feet by wrapping tight bandages around the feet of little girls, about five or six years old.
 * [[image:http://www.historyforkids.org/learn/china/clothing/pictures/shoe.GIF width="170" height="106" caption="golden lotus shoe"]] ||
 * golden lotus shoe ||

A shoe for someone with bound feet

The bandages were so tight they broke the girls’ toes and bent them underneath their feet and then they had to walk on them like that. The girls spent most of their time crying for two or three years and then the feet stopped hurting so much. Women with bound feet couldn’t walk very well at all, and when they had to work in the fields often they would crawl. Some of the earliest versions of the story of Cinderella come from Sung Dynasty China. In these versions, the point of the story is that the Prince loves Cinderella because she has the smallest feet of any girl in the kingdom, so the slipper will only fit her. Interesting!! Great information! Then in the Yuan Dynasty, the Mongols brought cotton to China. At first people didn’t want to grow cotton, maybe because the people running the silk industry wanted to keep people buying silk. But the Mongol invasions in the 1200’s destroyed a lot of the mulberry trees that were needed to make silk. The Mongol emperors, like Kublai Khan, turned to cotton to fill the gap. In 1289 AD they ordered the opening of special training centers to teach farmers how to grow cotton. And in 1296 they ordered that farmers who grew cotton could pay lower taxes. Soon everyone liked cotton better than ramie or hemp. Cotton was warmer, and softer, and stronger, and cheaper. You could make it thin for summer, or you could make thick padded clothes out of it that were warm for winter." <span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);">This last paragraph doesn't fit into the paper at all? Where are the citations for this information???

<span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);">Closing paragraph??

The information below looks like it's just a repeat of what you wrote above?? Why?
 * Carr, Dr. Karen. "Ancient Chinese Clothing history for Kids." __Ancient Chinese clothing- silk, cotton, foot binding, and more__ Tuesday, Jan 20 2009 20 Mar 2009**

[[image:http://www.historyforkids.org/learn/china/clothing/pictures/footbinding.gif width="300" height="268" caption="footbinding xrays"]]
X-ray pictures of someone with bound feet and a diagram

//__** In the <span class="wiki_link_ext">Sung Dyn **__//
media type="youtube" key="H_FYM2Y4AR4" height="344" width="425"> === lotutes. "youtube :LOTUS FOOT, bound foot." __LOTUS FOOT, bound foot__. October 19, 2007. 24 Mar 2009 <http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=H_FYM2Y4AR4&eurl=http%3A%2F%2Fwww.historyforkids.org%2Flearn%2Fchina%2Fclothing%2F&feature=player_embedded>. ===

A shoe for someone with bound feet
===Legend has it that lotus or lily foot slippers first appeared in China in the 11th century when Empress Taki was born with deformed feet. To save her future embarrassment, her father announced that only women with very small feet could be truly feminine and desirable. As a result women began to bind their feet. The tiny, virtually unusable feet were a mark of status, beauty, gentility and sexual attractiveness (Car pg#).=== ===The binding process began at age 5 to 7 years old. Bandages were wrapped around the foot to bend the four smaller toes inward under the foot towards the heel until it resembled a half moon.The majority of young girls had their feet bound by their mothers. Binding a daughters feet would ensure she would be married and hopefully to a wealthy man. The initial process of binding the feet took just one night but the feet took years of pain to conform into the beautiful crescent shape. During a painful 2-3 year period, the size of the shoe was gradually reduced. The most highly desired goal being a size only three inches in length.===

Back when the country was just forming the richer people would wear silk outfits with elaborate designs and the poorer people would wear cloth clothes with little or no design.
<span style="color: rgb(0, 0, 255);">**Carr, Dr. Karen. "Ancient Chinese Clothing history for Kids." __Ancient Chinese clothing- silk, cotton, foot binding, and__ Tuesday, Jan 20 2009 20 Mar 2009**

<span class="wiki_link_ext">"Ming dynasty (1400's <span class="wiki_link_ext">AD )

Men and women in china wore things like tunics. tunics are like really long t shirts or dresses. Women wore tunics with belts
=== People in <span class="wiki_link_ext">Chin a generally wore tunics (like long t-shirts). Women wore long tunics down to the ground, with belts, and men wore shorter ones down to their knees. Sometimes they wore jackets over their tunics. In the winter, when it was cold, people wore padded jackets over their tunics, and sometimes longer pants under them. In early China, poor people made their clothes of hemp or ramie. Rich people wore <span class="wiki_link_ext">silk. ===

Most people in China, both men and women, wore their hair long. People said that you got your hair from your <span class="wiki_link_ext">parents and so it was disrespectful to cut it.
=== During the <span class="wiki_link_ext">Sui Dynasty, in the 500's <span class="wiki_link_ext">AD , the emperor decided that all poor people had to wear blue or black clothes, and only rich people could wear colors. ===

=== The bandages were so tight they broke the girls’ toes and bent them underneath their feet and then they had to walk on them like that. The girls spent most of their time crying for two or three years and then the feet stopped hurting so much. Women with bound feet couldn’t walk very well at all, and when they had to work in the fields often they would crawl. Some of the earliest versions of the story of <span class="wiki_link_ext">Cinderella come from Sung Dynasty China. In these versions, the point of the story is that the Prince loves Cinderella because she has the smallest feet of any girl in the kingdom, so the slipper will only fit her. === === Then in the <span class="wiki_link_ext">Yuan Dynasty, the Mongols brought <span class="wiki_link_ext">cotton to China. At first people didn’t want to grow cotton, maybe because the people running the silk industry wanted to keep people buying <span class="wiki_link_ext">silk. But the <span class="wiki_link_ext">Mongol invasions in the 1200’s destroyed a lot of the mulberry trees that were needed to make silk. The Mongol emperors, like Kublai Khan, turned to cotton to fill the gap. In 1289 <span class="wiki_link_ext">AD they ordered the opening of special training centers to teach farmers how to grow cotton. And in 1296 they ordered that farmers who grew cotton could pay lower <span class="wiki_link_ext">taxes. Soon everyone liked cotton better than ramie or hemp. Cotton was warmer, and softer, and stronger, and cheaper. You could make it thin for summer, or you could make thick padded clothes out of it that were warm for winter." ===


 * __ Citations for Connections Chinese Beauty Project __** **Moosen**

<span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);">The works cited should not be separated by type they should all be listed as one works cited page in alphabetical order. __Internet Sources__ === 3. Lotutes. "YouTube: LOTUS FOOT, bound foot." __LOTUS FOOT, bound foot__. October 19, 2007. 24 Mar 2009 <http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=H_FYM2Y4AR4&eurl=http%3A%2F%2Fwww.historyforkids.org%2Flearn%2Fchina%2Fclothing%2F&feature=player_embedded>. === __ Book Sources __
 * 1) ** Vanessa. "China Olympics Turned Child Beauty Pageant." 12/9/08 22 Mar 2009 <[]>. **
 * 2. Carr, Dr. Karen. "Ancient Chinese Clothing history for Kids." Ancient Chinese clothing- silk, cotton, foot binding, and more Tuesday, Jan 20 2009 20 Mar 2009 **
 * 1) ** “China life” ,Mike Taylor, Library of Congress 1999 **
 * 1) ** Junior World Mark, Encyclopedia of World Cultures, Jane Hohher (Editor) 1999, Library of Congress p 137 **

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<span style="display: block; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; color: rgb(38, 0, 255); background-color: rgb(255, 0, 208); text-align: left;">Rubrics for your Research Paper

- The research paper must contain a thesis statement that is discussed and proven in the paper. Stick to your topic. 50 pts +40 -Paper discuss beauty in the culture you were assigned and also reflects on how that beauty is maintained. 30pts +30 -Each group must complete an outline BEFORE they start writing their paper and submit it with the final paper. 20 pts +0 - Parenthetical citations (in MLA format) must be used correctly throughout paper. 25 pts +5 - A works cited page must be included at the end of your paper. 20 pts +15 -Researched information must be paraphrased correctly or in quotes. 25 pts +25 --Each group has used at LEAST two book sources, one internet source, and one database source. 15 pts +15 - Paper includes photos and video that enhance writing. 40pts +40 -Paper contains correct spelling, transitions, complex sentence structures, and good vocabulary. 20 pts +10 -Photos and video are placed in appropriate places in the paper. 15pts +15

<span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);">Total Points: 195/260 = 75 C <span style="color: rgb(0, 0, 255);">