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Thesis Statement: French beauty has been very influential to other countries and France is home to many interesting designers, fashions, and models. The way french become beautiful has also affected other countries. Good thesis statement and outline looks great! =====

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Each country has its own perception of what is beautiful and what is not. French people hold their citizens and models to a high standard of beauty and they have influenced other countries with their ideas about makeup, hair and fashion. Many famous fashion designers have originated in France and their designs have taken the world by storm. French beauty has been very influential to other countries and France is home to many interesting designers, fashions, and models. Great intro =====

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The French people wear modern style clothes "the black beret" is the most associated with men in rural areas. They wear traditional costumes on holidays or celebrations. Women would wear lower case W White laced trimmed blouses and aprons decorated in a floral design. Naturally women wear white, flared bonnets, and dresses with elbow length sleeves ("France" 178). This is a costume without sleeves.=====

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You need a transition here Chanel believed fashion should be functional as well as chic. Radically simple, is this paraphrased? her LBD what's this? was designed not to show stains and to fit every woman. It was meant as the fashion ideal: a perfectly simple, yet sexy object (Linda Ames page 1). The citation just needs the authors Last name and page # For a French model to get to a runway they have to have experience of one. There are no extended rehearsals and the designers that are looking for a model need to see photos so they can schedual the models' fitting. Some famous french models are Vanessa Paradis and Laetitia Casta are well known. Vanessa is no longer a model but she stands out from the rest.The French clothing style is one of the most sophisticated and classic dress styles in Europe, and [|travelers] to France can fit in with the culture by dressing and accessorizing according to French standards. French clothing is typically of high quality, and most men and women wear designer outfits whether they are at work, going out or entertaining friends.(Tavelers.com page1)The facts in this paragraph are jumpy you go from Chanel, to specific models, to clothing. edul TheThe =====

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 French women love to keep themselves looking thin and beautiful, as long as it doesn't involve exercise. They rub cream into their hands and feet whenever possible to give them that full skin glow. A common French woman, named Manon Parisian says, "Every week, I cover my hands and feet in cream and then wrap them in clingfilm for the whole night.”(Helena Frith Powell). good way to incorporate a quote! The Metrospa hand and foot facial at Richard Ward’s salon in London, gives their clients microdermabrasion (a cosmetic procedure in which the skin is sprayed with abrasive crystals to remove dead skin cells) before a pedicure or manicure. This procedure leaves your avoid you and your in professional writing skin as soft as a babies bottom.=====

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Another tip for french women that gives them all-over-smooth skin is to put on body lotion after a shower when wet, this keeps moisture in more effectively(Helena Frith Powell). Another beauty technique used by the French is Biafine. Biafine is used as a face mask for minor burns and rashes. French women do not believe in too much makeup, it is all about natural beauty. The “le no make-up look” is very big with women in France. Less is more, according to Marie-Pierre Lannelongue, the fashion editor of French Elle. A French woman always needs to look good, no matter what she is doing, as long as people see her she has to look beautiful(Helena Frith Powell). Good information =====

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French women love beautiful skin and they are proud of how they look. In France getting facials is an important part of a women's life.<span style="font-size: 10pt; line-height: 115%; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif;">Girls as young as 15 start getting thier <span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);">sp own monthly facials as well. Whatever they do to their skin when they are younger that will affect how their skin looks when they are older. F <span style="font-size: 10pt; color: rgb(0, 0, 0); line-height: 115%; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif;">rench women love how they look so they put on makeup only to bring out more of their beauty. They take so good care of their skin that they do not have to have major procedures, like botox and face lifts, done to enhance their facial beauty. <span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);">That sounds like a better idea to me! =====

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<span style="font-size: 10pt; color: rgb(0, 0, 0); line-height: 115%; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif;"><span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);">Need a transition here Coco Chanel was born August 19, 1883. "Coco Chanel was born the second illegitimate daughter of traveling salesman Albert Chanel and his companion Jeanne Devolle in the small city of Saumur, Maine-et-Loire, =====

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<span style="font-size: 10pt; color: rgb(0, 0, 0); line-height: 115%; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif;">France. Her parents got married in 1880. When she was 6, her mother died, and a short time later, her father abandoned the family. Soon after the young Chanel spent seven years in the orphanage of the Catholic monastery of Aubazine, where she learned the trade of a seamstress"(French Fashion Designers [].) <span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);">this citation only needs the title of the website and the punctuation should go after the citation. She opened a shop in Paris, in 1913 selling ladies' hats, and in a year Chanel moved her fashion business to the Rue Cambon. =====

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<span style="font-size: 10pt; color: rgb(0, 0, 0); line-height: 115%; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif;">In 1921, Chanel No. 5 perfume was shown for the first time by Coco. The perfume was sold worldwide, and the straight lines of the bottle stood out from the other famous perfume bottles. The No. 5 in "Chanel No. 5", is said to be Coco's lucky number, but it was actually chosen as the fifth sample. A little bit after Pierre Wertheimer became her partner in the perfume business in 1924. "Wertheimer owned 70% of the company, while Chanel received only 10% and her friend Bader 20%. Oddly enough, Chanel No. 5 porfume became a thorn in Coco's side, as she received very little income from its success. In the late 1950s, Marilyn Monroe announced that Chanel No. 5 was her favourite perfume"(French Fashion Designers: [].) Now, a bottle of Chanel No. 5 is sold every 30 seconds. <span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);">Interesting! =====

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<span style="font-size: 10pt; color: rgb(0, 0, 0); line-height: 115%; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif;">"The famous Chanel suit, introduced in 1923, was an elegant suit comprising a knee-length skirt and trim, boxy jacket, traditionally made of woven wool with black trim and gold buttons and worn with large costume-pearl necklaces. Coco Chanel also revieled the little black dress, whose blank-slate versatility allowed it to be worn for day and evening, depending on how it was accessorized. Although unassuming black dresses existed before Chanel but the ones she designed were considered made with the haute couture standards" In 1923, she told Harper's Bazaar that "simplicity is the keynote of all true elegance." The nickname Coco was evidently acquired at La Roto."(French Fashion Designers: [].) Coco was a nick-name which means "little pet." She never married.<span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);">Why is this whole paragraph a quote? You MUST paraphrase your information and the paragraphs above look as though they need some paraphrasing work also. =====

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<span style="font-size: 10pt; color: rgb(0, 0, 0); line-height: 115%; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif;">For more than 30 years, Gabrielle Chanel made the Hôtel Ritz in Paris her home. During the Nazi occupation of Paris when she was criticized for Antisemitism and homophobia, and for having an affair with Hans Gunther von Dincklage, a Nazi officer who arranged for her to stay in the Hôtel Ritz Paris. He later turned out to be an intelligence agent. Chanel died on January 10, 1971 in Paris and is buried there in a tomb surrounded by five stone lions. "Chanel has been portrayed on the Broadway stage many times by Katharine Hepburn in a musical by Andre Previn and Alan Jay Lerner, and on screen by the French actress Marie-France Pisier" A new play based on her life, 'Creme de Coco,' is debuting very soon, in April, 2007. The House of Chanel in Paris, now under Karl Lagerfeld, remains one of the top design worldwide houses today.Coco Chanel clothing is very famous and will be for quite a while.<span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);">Citations? =====

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<span style="font-size: 10pt; color: rgb(0, 0, 0); line-height: 115%; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif;">Dior was born January 21, 1905**.** Christian's family had hopes he would become a diplomat and sent him to Ecole des Sciences Politiques from 1920 to 1925, but Dior =====

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<span style="font-size: 10pt; color: rgb(0, 0, 0); line-height: 115%; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif;">wanted to be an artist. After graduating from school he received money from his dad so that in 1928 he could open a small art gallery in Paris. During the 1930s Dior made a living by making sketches for Haute Couture Houses. In 1945 he designed for Marcel Boussac. Boussac, a man who loved working with fabric, was interested in Diors new idea that involved using lots of layers of different and unique fabrics. In 1947 premiered Christian Dior's first collection, Corolle Line. In just two years he established his main fashion house, Christian Dior New York, Inc. "The actual phrase the "New Look" was coined by the famous editor-in-chief of Harpers Bazaar, Carmel Snow. The look was refreshing pens and much more voluptuous than the old style boxy shapes of the recent World War 2 designs"(French Fashion Designers[].) =====

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<span style="font-size: 10pt; color: rgb(0, 0, 0); line-height: 115%; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif;">They quote Dior saying "I have designed flower women." His designs were classic but elegant looks. Dior died on October 24, 1957 at the age of 52. His tragical death ten days later of a heart attack after choking on a fishbone at dinner shocked the world of fashion. The French newspaper Le Monde described him as a man who was “identified with good taste, the art of living and refined culture that epitomises Paris to the outside world”. Marcel Boussac sent his private plane to Montecatini to bring Dior’s body back to Paris, around 2,500 people attended his funeral including all his staff and famous clients. To me it seems that Dior's passion is still alive but living in his clothes.<span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);"> AGAIN this info must be paraphrased and cited! =====

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<span style="font-size: 10pt; color: rgb(0, 0, 0); line-height: 115%; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif;">french designers have created designs that have been worn all over the world. French women are also shown everywhere and their cosmetics are also very popular as well as the procedures they have done. So french women are basically very popular over all in general.<span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);">This is a strange conclusion. =====

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<span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);">Where is your Works Cited page?? Do you have a video?

<span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);">Ladies - I looked at your other pages and see that you do have a works cited page completed BUT the directions were to put it on your final page after the paper so I will give you some points because I saw that it was done BUT I did not see a video anywhere.

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Claire's section put on the wrong page Some French models are very pretty, but do they know what beauty really is? With all the research we've been doing it seems to me<span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);"> This should not include your opinion do not use I. they care **a lot** more about their body image, clothes and make-up! I mean I can see why but //do// they know what true beauty is? Models don't take the time to worry about true beauty.


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French Models love to be tall and very skinny! They sometimes wear lots of make-up. Someone felt their models were too skinny and he wanted them to wear his dresses right, he said, "I have never wanted to use girls that are too skinny. I prefer girls that show off my clothes in the best way." (eatingdisorders.com par.5) <span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);">Who was this "someone?" Sometimes people like when the models are that skinny and some people don't like it at all. They want to find someone who can wear the dress for the way they designed it! As long as they don't have to work super hard for it, body Image is very important to these models! <span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);">You need to expand on this idea - this section needs more detail!


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- The research paper must contain a thesis statement that is discussed and proven in the paper. Stick to your topic. 50 pts +50 -Paper discuss beauty in the culture you were assigned and also reflects on how that beauty is maintained. 30pts +30 -Each group must complete an outline BEFORE they start writing their paper and submit it with the final paper. 20 pts +20 - Parenthetical citations (in MLA format) must be used correctly throughout paper. 25 pts +25 - A works cited page must be included at the end of your paper. 20 pts +10 -Researched information must be paraphrased correctly or in quotes. 25 pts Jenna+25 Athena +0 Jamie +10 --Each group has used at LEAST two book sources, one internet source, and one database source. 15 pts +15 - Paper includes photos and video that enhance writing. 40pts +20 -Paper contains correct spelling, transitions, complex sentence structures, and good vocabulary. 20 pts +10 -Photos and video are placed in appropriate places in the paper. 15pts +8

<span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);"> Total Points: Claire - 184/260= 70 C- Jamie 198 /260= 76 C Athena- 188/260= 72 C- Jenna- 213/260= 82 B- ||